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    Post by Aelita Sun Mar 03, 2013 9:44 pm

    You guys are the only people who have seen this, this is the only copy I have put out there, and lucky for you, this is the copy where I'll let it come out partly unfinished (Kinda). Red parts are parts I improvised in instead of typing it all out. Anyway, Let me know what you think Very Happy

    Made a few grammatical corrections, so consider that if you spot one, no I'm not fixing it, to much work to get it up I the first place








    A/N: well, here we go, my first original story, Hope its good.
    Dis, wait, I don’t need a Disclaimer LOL
    Chapter 1
    “Hey Delita, What’s up?” A girl, about 14, with Mid-Waste Length Blond hair, wearing Skinny jeans and a tight black T-shirt.
    “Oh, hey there Sis, nothing much, you?” A girl, about 14, with short Dark red hair wearing Skinny jeans, a white T-Shirt, and a partly unzipped red sweater.
    “Oh nothing much,” Delita’s sister replays.
    “Hey, Elana!” A boy, wearing Jeans and a Black T- Shirt runs up.
    “Hey Brad, what are you up to?” Elana, Delita’s sister, says to Brad.
    “Oh nothing much, hey, you two want to go and explore?” Brad asks.
    “Why not?” Delita and Elana say in unison.
    “Ok, follow me,” Brad says, then he walks off, and the two girls follow, and he leads them to an old, abandoned, and creepy looking computer factor.
    “Um, what is this place?” Elana asks, slightly creeped.
    “The old computer factory,” Delita answers, excited.
    “Let’s go,” Brad says.
    “I’m Kind of creeped,” Elana says, then brad goes over and comforts her, she smiles, then all three go into the spooky factory and explore around, and eventually find an old elevator, but it looks to be in perfect shape.
    “What the? This thing should be old and rotted half way, not in perfect shape, want to see where it goes?” Delita asks, really wanting to see where it goes.
    “Ok,” both of her companions say, and they all three get on, and Delita hits the down button, and the door of the freight elevator closes and they go down, down, down, then it stops, and the doors open.
    “Whoa,” they found a supercomputer, a highly advanced one.
    “Um, Good thing you’re smart Delita, There is no way me or Brad could figure this out.” Delita then looks out it, and finds a label, reading ‘terminal upstairs,’ and then in very small text under it, it says ‘why did I put this here?’ “Ok, so the terminal’s upstairs, where’s on the switch?” she looks around some more and finds it, then flips it on, and the computer hums to life. “Ok, let’s go upstairs,” Delita and company get into the elevator and go up and find the terminal; the she goes and sits in the chair and starts typing. “Let’s see what you have under the hood my friend,” she then hits enter and the monitors light up and a few windows open, a command prompt type window, a computer static window, and a video chat type window with a girl with blue hair wearing a blue version of my Lyoko outfit, ”whoa.”
    “Who, who are you? Where am I?” The girl asks.
    “This is incredible.” Delita says, impressed, “um, hello?” She then says trying to contact the girl.
    “Yes?” The Girl replies, hearing Delita.
    “What are you doing in there?” Delita asks.
    “I don’t know,” The girl replies.
    “What can you see or what are you in?” Delita asks, trying to help the girl figure things out.
    “A tower of some kind I don’t see a way out,” The girl replies, telling Delita she’s inside a tower of some kind with no apparent way out.
    “Ok, um, maybe you can walk through the wall?” Delita guesses.
    On the virtual World, The girl walks to the wall on the only path she can, and touches the wall, and then is pulled though into a magical looking forest, it’s so calm, “Whoa, this is so amazing, you just have to see this.”
    “I would love to; can you send me a visual?” Delita asks, just before a visual pops up, allowing her to see what the girl is seeing, “whoa,” Delita then sees a girl walk out from behind a tree, she has should length Brunet hair, and is wearing basically a black version of Yumi’s Lyoko outfit “Who is that?” Delita asks, and then she spawns a sword, “RUN!” Delita yells, and the blue haired girl does just that into a tower, and gets to safety.

    A girl, Mid Waste Black hair, wearing Skinny Jeans and a Green Long Sleeve Shirt runs up to Delita, Elana, and Brad, “Hey guys, what were you up to last night?”
    “Oh, hey there Harly, we were just exploring the city some more,” Delita explains.
    “Cool, can I come next time?” Harly requests, not pushing for more details on the previous exploration.
    “Don’t see why not,” Brad says.
    “Awesome!” Harly says excitedly, then a bell rings.
    “Time for class,” Delita says, then she, Elana, Brad, and Harly all go to class, and the day goes by normally, then the end of day bell rings and they meet up in the court yard.
    “What are we going to do today?” Elana asks.
    “Watch a movie?” Brad suggests.
    “Ok,” Harly and Elana agree.
    “You guys go ahead, I have to go do something,” Delita says.
    “Ok, see ya,” her three friends tell her, then they part, and Delita goes to the factory, and sits in the seat of the terminal.
    “Um, You there?” she asks, and the video chat type window with the blue hair girl pops up again.
    “Of course, Delita,” The girl says.
    “Ok, you want me to try and get you off of there?” Delita asks.
    “Yes.”
    “Ok, let’s get to work,” she gets to work. After a few hours the girl feels the ground vibrate.
    “What the?”
    “What’s up?” Delita asks.
    “The ground is vibrating,” The girl says
    “Odd, hang on, let’s see if I can find get something to search for why,” Delita says as she starts typing.

    With Delita’s friends, they are watching a nice movie no one can complain about, when the TV goes out, along with every electrical object that was plugged in, suggesting a power surge. “A power surge?” Elana asks.
    “Guess so,” Brad says.
    “Now what?” Harly asks.
    “How about we run?” Elana suggests, hopping up and running away from something, when Harly and Brad look, they see a ball of electricity, they run as well, then the ball follows after they have a good 3 minute head start.

    Delita’s phone ring, “Yeah?”
    “Delita, Electric ball, chase us, what is going on?” Brad says quickly.
    “Hey, I think I know why the ground’s vibrating,” she says to the girl, “ok, get over here now, try to distract or loss that thing!”
    “Ok,” Brad hangs up, “ok, we have to get there, but we have to loss that ball.”
    “How about under round?” Harly suggests.
    “Fine,” Elana agrees, but doesn’t quite like the idea of going into the sewers. They find the nearest manhole, and go down it then replace the cover; the electric ball goes past not noticing.
    “Good, we lost it, now let’s go,” They run off for their factory.

    The elevator opens and Delita looks, seeing her friends, “good, you’re safe, ok, let’s go help her, you three first, go down one floor and step in the tube like things.” Her friends follow through, and Delita sends them off to the virtual world, then she starts a self, and sends herself into the world. Delita is wearing a white Skin tight outfit, with a white coat like thing with blue trim, Elana is wearing the same thing but with a darker color theme, Brad’s wearing basically a Reddish version of William’s Lyoko outfit, minus a Xana Symbol, and Harly is wearing a Purple Skin Tight Jump suit with a transparent skirt. They land in front of a tower, the blue haired girl walks out and smiles.
    “Welcome,” she greets, then they head off for the tower, upon arrive, they hide, seeing it is guarded by that Girl with an Iron Sword, A Mid-Waste Length, Blond hair girl wearing a Black skin tight jump suit holding a magician’s staff.
    “Ok, what’s the plan?” Brad asks.
    “Ok, two verses four, should be easy enough,” Delita says, spawning a Diamond Sword, as Elana Figures out how to spawn her Black Diamond Sword, Brad his Gold Sword, and Harly her Bow, “OK, let’s go, Coral, Stay here,” The blue haired girl nod, and the 4 friends run out to fight, the two guards notice, and The magician one holds up her staff and lightning strikes, right in front of the four friends.

    A/N: Ok, cliff hanger first chapter, mostly due to the fact of writer’s block and I want to get this out.


    (Possible spoiler below, don’t read if you don’t want to have a vague idea of what will happen next)




    Hey guys, I need your help, I need a name for Delita to use online, on YouTube or MC or ROBLOX or Skype, or something else, and I am currently uncreative with names right now and don’t want to keep you waiting forever, so please, suggestions, original names, nothing that is taken. And if this is too much of a spoiler, sorry, tried to make it as general and vague as possible while still getting the message a crossed, I do not like to spoil my stories.


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    Post by DELTA 001 Mon Mar 04, 2013 8:19 am

    darkshot?
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    Post by Aelita Mon Mar 04, 2013 2:44 pm

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    Post by DELTA 001 Tue Mar 05, 2013 7:19 am

    for the name Wink
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    Post by Aelita Tue Mar 05, 2013 1:46 pm

    Name of whom?
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:04 pm

    XANA Awakens. Original style, hate to sound selfish, but am I in it, cause if I am, don't make me sound suicidal like you do all the time.
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:06 pm

    Sorry, I was intending on using only my OCs
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:07 pm

    Ok. That's cool
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:08 pm

    OK, though, I am open for name ideas lol
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:09 pm

    What Genders?

    Oh, Nd use the name Angel. Please use Angel
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:10 pm

    Sorry, Don't have any girls planed at the moment. I need a male name.
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:12 pm

    Issac?
    Sirrus?
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    Kadish (pronounced Kay-Dish)
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:13 pm

    preferably American names.
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:14 pm

    Matthew is American.
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:14 pm

    Ok, I'll think about them.
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:19 pm

    Happy to help. Smile
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:20 pm

    Smile
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:23 pm

    A smile....

    Good, good, that means progress.
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:23 pm

    lol
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:29 pm

    Ahh, there's a laugh.


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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:32 pm

    here's another lol
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:35 pm

    Sweet (look? Words? Letters???) of laughter.
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:35 pm

    ?
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    Post by Shadowfiend02 Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:53 pm

    You put lol, which means laughing, but I can't physically hear you laugh, so I was trying to be funny.
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    Post by Aelita Sat Mar 09, 2013 8:53 pm

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